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[读后续写]读后续写 Sara Savick remembers one special Easter when she was nine years old

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阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

Sara Savick remembers one special Easter when she was nine years old. Her parents gave her a baby duckling in a yellow basket.

“Mom said later that she bought the little duck because she felt sorry for it,” recalled Sara. The people at the pet store colored the feathers pink for Easter. Sara named the duck Pinky.

Sara’s mother really didn’t think the baby duck would survive very long. But to her surprise, Pinky grew and got stronger and stronger. Soon, the little duckling was a healthy, hungry duck with white feathers.

“We fed Pinky oatmeal, cooked and uncooked, and small pieces of vegetables,” said Sara. Pinky lived inside the house with Sara and her family. She specially fancied taking baths with Sara. Everyone treated Pinky as a family member.

But just when everything appeared to be perfect, the night of the “talk” came. Sara’s Mom and Dad sat her down, explaining that the best thing for Pinky was to live a normal duck life, with other ducks. It was not natural for ducks to live indoors with a family, her father told her. He added Pinky needed to swim in ponds and do all the same things that ducks in the wild do.

Sara started to cry, knowing what was going to happen. Sara’s parents decided to take Pinky to a park, which was two miles away. There was a pond with a lot of other ducks. Pinky would have the chance to live a natural life and Sara could still visit her.

The big day came, Sara and her parents put Pinky in a box and drove to the park. Sara said that Pinky did not look happy; maybe Pinky was convinced that she was a human, not a duck.

注意:

所续写短文的词数应为 l50 左右;

至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;

续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph 1

Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond, even Sara’s father.

Paragraph 2

The next morning, when looking out of the kitchen window, Sara couldn’t believe her eyes!

参考范文

Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond, even Sara’s father. But he tried to convince Sara that Pinky was fine. Walking towards the car, Sara looked over her shoulder and saw Pinky standing alone. The other ducks were swimming around in circles, looking at Pinky. To Sara, it seemed that they were trying to identify the strange animal. They didn’t recognize Pinky as a duck. Worried about Pinky, Sara dreamed of Pinky being bullied by other ducks the whole night.

The next morning, when looking out of the kitchen window, Sara couldn’t believe her eyes! There was Pinky, happily walking around on the grass. Thrilled at what she saw, she kept asking herself,” How did she make it?” After all, it was two miles away and he managed to walk back through the city street. Incredible! But her parents drove Pinky back to the pond again regardless of her request. The following morning, there was Pinky again on the grass! Seeing Pinky again, her father, waving his arms about wildly, moved his lips without saying anything. Meanwhile, Sarah, overjoyed, hugged Pinky tightly, tears streaming down her cheeks.

解析:

【分析】这是一篇读后续写作文。阅读部分主要阐述了故事的主人公收到了一个圣诞节的礼物

——黄色的小鸭子,随着小鸭子的长大,父母认为小鸭子应该和其他正常的鸭子一样生活,于是决定放生小鸭子。

【详解】第一步:把握文章主题。

仔细阅读所给短文,把握短文核心内容是完成续写的前提。本文讲的是一个故事,故事的主人公 Sara 收到了一个圣诞节的礼物——黄色的小鸭子,随着小鸭子的长大,父母认为小鸭子应该和其他正常的鸭子一样生活,于是决定放生小鸭子。

第二步:预测故事的发展。根据已知人物、事件及续写段落的首句进行预测。根据 Paragraph 1 的首句Everyone was sad when they left Pinky at the pond, even Sara’s father. 可预测到一家人怀着不舍和担忧放走了小鸭子,再根据 Paragraph 2 The next morning, when looking out of the kitchen window, Sara couldn’t believe her eyes! 可预测小鸭子居然又回到了一家三口身边。

第三步:罗列写作要点,结合文本中划线词语和预测,展开想象,罗列出故事情节发展。

第四步:连词成篇。结合罗列的要点,恰当使用衔接词。避免重复使用同一个单词或短语,避免只使用一两个句式。

第五步:认真检查。检查行文是否流畅、合逻辑、时态、人称是否一致,句子结构是否清晰,短语使用、单词拼写是否正确等。

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